August 30, 2006
Freecycle and Verse
I just posted the following. I’ll update it as I get replies, and we can all critique them.
Offered: Wireless keyboard and Cat scratching post/stand thingy
The wireless keyboard has PS/2 plugs.
There used to be a mouse as well.
Who knows what’s become of that mouse without wires.
For typing, the keyboard’s still swell.Upon the stand my kitty used to play.
And scratch on carpet soft and rope wound tight.
But now on top another cat will splay
For she’s gone gently into that good night.Best response in the same meter as was used for each (respectively) gets it.
First response
I too have a mouseless machine
Of the kind that weighs just an ounce
But there’s often a dead one in the hall
Upon whom my cats did pouncePerhaps if they had their own toy cat house
In which to scamper, scratch, and play and roam
They would be happy not to kill a mouse
And I’d have a vegetarian home[name removed]
P.S. I don’t need the item for which I didn’t use the same meter
Second Response
For the unhitched keyboard I have a marriage to propose
The guy is a decent computer from the reputable family of Dell
Getting on the same frequency they’ll talk like long-lost friends
Love will be in the air for everyone to tell
Third Response
We have no use for a keyboard for those plugs
Our Mac prefers another type of mouse!
Our keyboard survived the coffee from the mug.
But our home just ain’t a Windoz type of house.However….
There are no playthings where our kitties want to splay,
They wander thru the house both day and night,
Searching for some carpet where their sharpened claws may play,
and scratchy rope for itchy nose delights!
Ian said,
August 31, 2006 at 4:25 pm
So far, #3 is my favorite for the scratching post. Closer to iambic than the first. Minor downgrade for using the same words to rhyme that I did.
JT said,
August 31, 2006 at 6:06 pm
It seems none of these people were English majors in college, or just forgot what meter was.
I can’t say I like any of them yet. But, I’m also a harsh poetry critic, so if I had to choose, I’d probably take #1.
Ian said,
August 31, 2006 at 6:36 pm
I’m willing to give them a pass for obvious effort. I also flubbed my dactyls a bit on my first quatrain.
#3 quatrain 2 is clearly iambic.